aaahhh your critique of what'shisface's poem, thesis, i think?

i appreciate it.

and i'm sorry, if i'm allowed to be, for silly people being silly about it.

please come critque my work if you want to.

or not.


if it doesn't sound very extra corny, i value your critiquing and commenting on so many pieces, it's really nice :]

keep it up,

funny faces and pancakes.

I truly enjoyed your analysis of Evad's "Thesis Deconstruction" which for some reason I keep wanting to type "Deconstructing Antithesis" but that's a different pome I'm sure. I'm really glad to have made discovery of you page. I consider Evad to be pretty darned gifted, but you offered some really amazing insight. So thank you for that too! ciao bella!
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Don't run away just yet, please?

Nice manuscript.

the 18th poem was perfect for my birthday, simple and complete and letting me know that there are people in the world who arent out to get me because they havent left the house

Hey

Thanks dearly for the critque/commment. Its too bad that I already submitted it into the contest but I am using this for a valuable lesson (as I need a lot of those).

To answer your question, I made the lines as short of possible because I wanted for it to be an easy read. For an odd reason, I've grown fond of short pieces of poetry, especially those with short lines (such as yours) so I was trying it out myself. Also, the third and fifth lines of each stanza are suppose to rhyme. I don't think I successfully mastered that.

And good point about the stanza with the layer of air. I guess it completely slipped my mind while I was typing it, and now I feel like a dumbass when I've alrady submitted it, but this is learning. Thanks for the tip, I will change it in my documents.

Thanks again for the critques. Have a good one, and good luck on your papers.

Happy early birthday.

--peace easy

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say what you will; say what you mean.
you could never offend;
your dirty words come out clean.

thankyou for your comment on 'Lydia'

it was an impulse - spitting out the emotion if you will. I'll go back and refine it later

Thanks for comment on Wrecked. If only everyone could be so helpful.

I'm back.

thanks for the fave. i am not much for punctuations....

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je pense donc je suis